Feedback from our roughcut

Pros -
Good use of sound - diegetic and non diegetic
Good graphics - the animation at the begining
Credits are good and fit in well
Good use of fade outs
Good variety of shot types
Editing in general fits well with sound
The title at the end is well presented
The flash transitions flow well

Cons - 
Fairly hard to follow
One clip is out of focus
Costumes could be better


Own feedback - aims-
Music wasn't suitable in some areas - redo and make some more music
First title maybe keep on screen for longer
Need to blur out Abbies face in all the scenes not just on one of them
Shots in the bathroom - try and make them zoom in and out - move about more!!
Shots upon shots - fading into each other
Mels face is too comical - cut it a lot shorter
Maybe do voice over for abis bit

Roughcut of the Outsider

story board pictures 3

story board pictures 2

story board pictures

Titles

New line cinema presents
A porthole production

Abbie Glover-main
Rachel Seaber-Shinn
Mel Vance
Zoe Masterson
R. Meeley
John Araskog

Casting by Edd Mcreeve
Music by Sally Eves
Costumes by Jessie M
Edited by Dirk H
Production designed by Harriet Hall
Written by Paul Harmon
Produced by L. Smith
Directed by Connor Sim

Storyline

The main idea for the opening is to have clips of scene shots. So it starts with production logo screen goes black at this point the film starts, then screen fades into black. First shot starts to appears of my feet walking down the cellar stairs then fades back into black. The tittles come on primarily at the bottom of the screen. then the next scene come from black.